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Old October 29th, 2006, 02:46 PM
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Welcome To My Website http://www.UbiAgents.com

this site born today 29/10/06!!!
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pws1970 agrees: I know English is not your first language but if your going to send a site out in English marketed
towards an English reading public then you need to get your grammar corrected otherwise it looks
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Old October 29th, 2006, 04:20 PM
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Welcome To My Website http://www.UbiAgents.com

this site born today 29/10/06!!!


You need to rethink the grammar in this site - its pigeon english and poor pigeon english at that. My English teacher would have a hairy fit reading your Home Page, never mind the rest of the site.

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Hi, are you tired when you think that you must work hard and for long time to get the money? and this is the reality of life!!! , we know from our experience and reading some of the success stories of some rich people that there is easier and faster way to get the money and we keep search it until this came one of our friends named Grace told us precisely what the rich do to get those massive wealth , this is job Like the rest of the work but it differs slightly


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Do you have $390 ? ...ok Do you ready? we will tell you the way that convert the $390 which you have to $64,000 per a week!


This one brought tears to my eyes:
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Every one of us When we become an agent will have 2 legs as we know and as we know all of us should sponsor at less one Agent in the Right leg and and the same in the left leg To activate the legs and to begin after agents in your down line, Since we are one family that we take our responsibility to help you for this we created this system to allow the new agents to activate the 2 legs in the fastest time.


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Old October 30th, 2006, 09:23 AM
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can you fix me and send me the fixed text?

THANKS YOU!
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Old October 30th, 2006, 10:44 AM
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can you fix me and send me the fixed text?

THANKS YOU!


kaid I can do some for you but not all, though it would obviously be difficult as what you mean and what I think you mean can be totally different. Just post here or PM me a few things as I won't be able to check your site from work.

Just like pws1970 that last one brought tears to my eyes, annoyed people here at work for laughing. No offence meant though kaid, I am not having a pop as I am rubbish with languages... including English
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Old October 30th, 2006, 02:48 PM
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kaid I can do some for you but not all, though it would obviously be difficult as what you mean and what I think you mean can be totally different. Just post here or PM me a few things as I won't be able to check your site from work.

Just like pws1970 that last one brought tears to my eyes, annoyed people here at work for laughing. No offence meant though kaid, I am not having a pop as I am rubbish with languages... including English


thanks you too I will wait your message
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the design and look of the website are fine. simple and useful.
however you can't publish such website.
the language there is horrible, if you don't have the time
and skills required, hire someone to go through all the texts
and fix them.
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kaid agrees: but thats good if the desgin look fine from your side
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Old October 31st, 2006, 12:33 PM
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I am real good with grammar but I can't rewrite it for you. I agree, my terminology and your interpretation could be two different things. More than likely, we would not see eye to eye on this project. It would take someone to be hired for this job. Are you willing to hire someone to translate what you want and correct the grammar involved?
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Old October 31st, 2006, 05:12 PM
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the design and look of the website are fine. simple and useful.
however you can't publish such website.
the language there is horrible, if you don't have the time
and skills required, hire someone to go through all the texts
and fix them.


I'm real happy if the desgin look fine from your side
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Old October 31st, 2006, 05:21 PM
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I am real good with grammar but I can't rewrite it for you. I agree, my terminology and your interpretation could be two different things. More than likely, we would not see eye to eye on this project. It would take someone to be hired for this job. Are you willing to hire someone to translate what you want and correct the grammar involved?


sure you are welcome
but first I need someone who real good in grammar to check your grammar

and then you Can start to work but first without any income thats because I still waiting for this when I start to withdraw money I Promis you I will pay to you

but for real thats too bad grammer in my website thats who visit the website will not understand what I'm excatly wan't to say ?

or 50% or how much he will understand ?
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sure you are welcome
but first I need someone who real good in grammar to check your grammar

and then you Can start to work but first without any income thats because I still waiting for this when I start to withdraw money I Promis you I will pay to you

but for real thats too bad grammer in my website thats who visit the website will not understand what I'm excatly wan't to say ?

or 50% or how much he will understand ?




This is a small example here, and I not trying to pick on your grammar as I know English is not your primary language:

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but for real thats too bad grammer in my website thats who visit the website will not understand what I'm excatly wan't to say ?

or 50% or how much he will understand ?

In English, you would want to say it similar to this for people to understand: "It is too bad that people will not be able to understand the concept of my website. Do you believe that at least 50% of the viewers will be able to interpret and browse easily through the site? -- of course, much of this is in my words.... just trying to give you some example that I hope will help you In all regards, the business concept for the site seems very approachable. I wish you luck and success in those ventures.
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Old November 1st, 2006, 07:54 AM
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In English, you would want to say it similar to this for people to understand: "It is too bad that people will not be able to understand the concept of my website. Do you believe that at least 50% of the viewers will be able to interpret and browse easily through the site? -- of course, much of this is in my words.... just trying to give you some example that I hope will help you In all regards, the business concept for the site seems very approachable. I wish you luck and success in those ventures.


thank you for encouraged me
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Old November 3rd, 2006, 03:04 AM
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guys again what the wrong in this website http://www.UbiAgents.net ?
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